Round 4 Results
Is it hard yet...? Nice work on Round 4, everyone. We had just one dropout, so that sucks, but oooh yeah, life goes on, long after the thrill of living is gone.
Ready to see the results for Round 4?
Ready to see who is moving on to Round 5, out of Dudecore and Hermaphrodeity and into the merged tribe?
Ready to see who will go to Redemption Island and face off against bloodsword, deciding once and for all who wins their way back into the game?
There's only going to be one elimination this round—from the Dudecore tribe—as NimrodKirkpatrick opted to drop out. So consider yourselves saved, Hermaphrodeity.
As usual, the highest-scoring person will choose who visits Exile Island.
Let's get to the results. And remember, SmackDowners, this time you'll be fighting for a grand total of 30 points.
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Detailed results for each person, divided by tribe (so feel free to scroll past the tribe you're not on, or don't):
Dudecore - Sub-genre: Military SF
Judgement by JettaFrame
Prompt - 4
Grammar - 4
Enjoyability - 2
Waffled. Storyline lacked impact. Effective humor and vivid description were however strong points of this story. Felt that this author simply tried to cover too much in too little time.
MadMikeMarsbergen's comment: Spotted a few more errors than would suit a 4 for SGP, so we'll drop that down to a 3.
Total score - 9/15
Judgement by MadMikeMarsbergen
1. Prompt Adherence - 5/5
All prompts were used effectively. Though I do wonder what Courtney would think of her character. "Do a Trump" was hilarious in this one.
2. Spelling, Grammar and Punctuation - 3/5
Some missing hyphens, a semicolon where a colon should be used, and some additional commas would have improved readability.
3. Story Enjoyability - 5/5
Another hilarious Angus tale. I knew from the title that I'd enjoy it. Excellent descriptions throughout and fast-paced.
Total score - 13/15
Combined score - 22/30
Judgement by HardeeBurger
Okay! As a preface, I must say that I don't know who the Survivor characters are, I don't know the songs or the bands that are singing them, though I do know at least what sort of music Slayer plays, based on their awesome cover art.
So with that, I gotta give L.V. a FIVE for prompt adherence, as she pointed out which pictures she used and used the word TRUMP.
She used good English and punctuation, and I like L.V.'s sentence structure better. FIVE.
Now to enjoyability. L.V.'s 'Tok vs. Terra' was worded well and linear. She did a bit too much telling for my liking, but SmackDowns are hard and the word limit can kill you. My biggest gripe it that the story just ended. No climax, no denouement. Just 'This is war' and 'The End.'
A definite, solid FOUR, for a total of FOURTEEN.
MadMikeMarsbergen's comment: I spotted more than a few errors, which would drop the SGP category down from 5/5 to a 3/5. "Unchartered space" should be "uncharted space," "oxygen generating organisms" should be "oxygen-generating organisms," and there were some misplaced commas that broke the flow of the sentences in which they were located.
Total score - 12/15
Judgement by OutrageousOllo
5 FOR PROMPT.
3 FOR GRAMMAR.
3 FOR ENJOYABILITY.
Didn't really connect with this story. I think it was just running on a different wavelength to me. I didn't feel very invested in the characters, and I thought the guys at the start were good (had a good reason for destroying the colony) until later, which was kinda weird to deal with. Plus, I stopped reading to snuggle my imaginary cat.
Total score - 11/15
Combined score - 23/30
Judgement by OutrageousOllo
5 FOR PROMPT: Unlike SOME people, a Trump was done and it was big and stinky.
2 FOR GRAMMAR: I hate to give you one, but this, sadly, is a 2. I saw at least 10 errors, including capitalization where it shouldn't have been, using "woman" instead of "women" for plural, a random closing bracket that you must have missed while editing, a lot of missing commas.
4 FOR ENJOYABILITY: I was gonna give you a 3, but then the ending really turned it around for me. The other problem was the grammar, which sadly got in the way of my reading. Sorry, dude. Also, lol what are those paragraph separator things? "~-o0O0o-~" it looks like some alien octopus or something, and it's so weird I would totally give you a bonus point if I could, but Mad Mike would so not allow that.
Total score - 11/15
Judgement by MadMikeMarsbergen
1. Prompt Adherence - 5/5
Perfect use of the prompts.
2. Spelling, Grammar and Punctuation - 2/5
I have to echo Olive's comments here.
3. Story Enjoyability - 4/5
Wicked imagery and description, and an excellent twist at the end. The need for another editing pass reduced my enjoyment a little.
Total score - 11/15
-1 point for being late
Combined score - 21/30
Hermaphrodeity - Sub-genre: Zombie SF
Judgement by HardeeBurger
Adam did not point out which pictures he used, though I know he used one, and I assume he used another. But he never mentioned Trump, so he gets a FOUR.
Used good English and punctuation. FIVE.
Adam, on the other hand, was not very linear. We kept going back to things that didn't happen in the story. Plus he did a lot more telling. Also, I didn't see any science in this Science Fiction story. It was more like Fantasy or Adventure. Also, I don't understand why people's heads started popping. That was weird. And why would you chain yourself to a zombie? It seems a surefire way to get ett, no matter how much you loved them before they got stinky and stupid and gross.
On top of all that, and to Adam's understanding, I'm sure, the cat jumped on my lap while I was reading 'The Living Mountain' and I started patting her.
So a THREE for enjoyability, for a total of TWELVE.
MadMikeMarsbergen's comment: I found enough missing hyphens to drop the SGP score down from a 5/5 to a 3/5.
Total score - 10/15
Judgement by OutrageousOllo
4 FOR PROMPT.
3 FOR GRAMMAR.
5 FOR ENJOYABILITY.
So when I read the author's note at the top I was kinda worried that it wouldn't be very self-contained, and that my enjoyability would depend on whether or not I had read TZP. Turns out I need not fear, as it was fine. Was also pretty cool to see a zombie story contain more to the lore than "people die and become zombies." Nice.
Total score - 12/15
Complete score - 22/30
Did not submit, dropped out.
Total score - 0/30
Judgement by JettaFrame
Prompt - 4
Grammar - 5
Enjoyability - 5
Simple storyline. Clear buildup and structure throughout. Fantastic humor. Developed characters. Engaging ending.
MadMikeMarsbergen's comment: See my SGP note below. Subtracting two points.
Total score - 12/15
Judgement by MadMikeMarsbergen
1. Prompt Adherence - 5/5
Clever use of the prompts. The former Survivor Dan was clearly researched, which—while not necessary—added to my own enjoyment and went above and beyond what was asked.
2. Spelling, Grammar and Punctuation - 3/5
Some missing hyphens and the like. When quoting something within dialogue, double quotes were used for both the quote and the dialogue. If you're using double quotes (") for dialogue, you're to use single quotes (') for what is being quoted within that dialogue. And likewise for the opposite, which is more common for books published using UK rules. Example: "You not know what 'hmm' mean?" (US) or 'You not know what "hmm" mean?' (UK)
3. Story Enjoyability - 4/5
It's always tough to judge comedies, as so much of it is subjective to what you personally find funny and dependent on how you feel at the time of watching/reading/whatever-ing it. This one made me laugh, yes, but not all the jokes landed for me.
Total score - 12/15
Combined score - 24/30
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As you guys know, due to NimrodKirkpatrick's dropping out, only one person—the lowest-scoring person from Dudecore—would be sent to Redemption Island following the results of this fourth round.
That person is: AllanFisher.
I'm sorry to say it, but you have been eliminated from Dudecore. However, your journey does not end here. You will have a shot at re-entering the game. Grab your nifty little sci-fi flashlight and head to Redemption Island, where you will face off against bloodsword in the third and final writing duel.
Also, Reffster had the highest score for this round (congrats!), which means they had to choose one of you remaining competitors to send to Exile Island.
They chose elveloy.
elveloy, you will be alone and afraid for the time being, but you will return to the game at the start of Round 5. In the meantime, you will be unable to compete in any bonus rounds. Sad, I know, but it'll be okay.
I will contact you via PM with the specific details of what happens while you're an Exile.
The rest of you—got nothin' for ya except a little shake at the bottom of the bag and some rained-on rolling papers.
Head back to camp and await your next challenge. Should be a little over a week or so before Round 5 goes up. But in the meantime there will be Bonus Round 4—so keep your eyes peeled for that—and you'll be able to watch the third and final Redemption Duel and see whether bloodsword or AllanFisher will be joining you in Round 5!
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