Title: Elusive Eternity

Author: WoodNymphWarrior

Genre: Mystery/Thriller

Quick Summary: Cruella de Vil... Cruella de Vil... if she doesn't scare you, no evil thing will...

Thoughts:

This book is three chapters long so there's not too terribly much I can say here, but here's what I can say.

The prose is clean but so far, but there were also a lot of adverbs in the first chapter that I noticed. Not that this is bad, but there was enough that they stood out to me - uncomfortably so.

Chapter 1 and 2 should've been one chapter together because they lead right into each other in a way that... doesn't... really... necessitate splitting them into two chapters. 

I don't have too good a sense of the main character. Though this is only three chapters long  so far, there's not much to MC yet aside from the fact she obviously dislikes the woman her father is helping, MC has weird powers, and she doesn't want anyone to know it. Her voice overall is... not the strongest.

I don't have much of a feel for the setting. There are towns and there's some sort of "not natural" activity going on but I'm not too fully aware whereabouts we are - by a lake? In Nevada? In the middle of nowhere? Without this sense of scene I just kinda... feel like we're floating through the book so far. It's still easily fixable, of course, so I would consider looking into doing so.

To add to this, the lack of development of the setting heavily impacts the plot. If she's in an average city, her entire personal conflict falls apart unless she's really close to her neighbors and such. I've lived in my town for a long time and honestly I don't know anything about the houses on my street aside from a small handful of facts about them overall. So it's... hard to believe that even if MC has "out there" abilities, anyone would really... care? That is, unless she's in a SUPER small town. Like, Gilmore Girls small. This... is a major reason why the setting and the size of such needs to be cemented ASAP.

The stepmom feels a bit two-dimensional, which is probably because I've only seen a little bit of her thus far. So far all I know is she's a massive fake and can be cruel when she wants to be. I want to know why. I want to know more about her. I want to know more about everyone. 

A final note, this might be better in "paranormal" than it would in "mystery/thriller"... but we'll see. 

I like this, but there's not much to tether my interest to this story. That's probably mostly because there's only three chapters - and they really should be two chapters.