Title: Feelstora

Author: lemon0804

Genre/s: Poetry

Number of Chapters: 54

Mature?: No

POV: N/A

Status: Ongoing

FEELSTORA

[in the author's own words]

☆A book of unforgotten feelings, unvoiced verses and unspoken words penned down to poetry☆

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B O O K R E V I E W

[Before we begin, please keep in mind that everything mentioned below is my personal opinion. My intention isn't to offend anyone; the only reason I am going into such detail is to be able to help my fellow writers out there. I do not claim to be correct; just sharing my opinion from my experience here on Wattpad. The following review is based off of the first 5 chapters / poems only.]

TITLE: This one word title is perfectly apt for a poetry book in my opinion. It captures the essence of your book perfectly and is clearly readable as well as unique. [More on this in the blurb section below.]

COVER: The title, genre and author's name are clearly visible and the image gives mysterious yet cosy vibes as well. Though the cover is perfectly adequate, I'd recommend experimenting with new styles of covers to see which ones attract readers most.

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BLURB: Apart from the cover and title, the blurb plays a major role in determining whether or not someone clicks on your story to check it out. The blurb is short and sweet - beautifully describes the general theme of your poems. If I were to make a suggestion, I'd say adding a little more to it could be useful. Possibly an excerpt or a small poem or even the meaning of your title (since it solidifies your blurb as well) as that can serve as a hook for your book that would make readers want to check it out.

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Judging from the 5 chapters I have read...

(INDIVIDUAL REVIEWS FOR EACH POETRY)

- EQUATION OF MAGIC -

This poem was so beautiful! The subtle metaphors, the moral lessons and philosophy, the use of wise catchphrases like Try-angle... It was an absolute delight to read this one! Very thought provoking and motivating. Loved it so much!

Suggested changes: Check whether it's "portion" or "potion" + Along "the" determination should be along "with" determination in my opinion.

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- GOLD OF LIFE -

I did not expect this poem to be this sweet and adorable. The title does not do justice to it. It was an absolutely wonderful journey expressing the way relationships grow. Absolutely loved the emotions built here.

Suggested changes: With "require" sounds a bit forced, just added there to rhyme but it didn't make sense in this line in my opinion. I'd suggest replacing this word with something else that rhymes + The flame "freezed" the snow - not sure if the irony is intentional but shouldn't it be the other way round where the ice freezes the flame? + "You being my prime" instead of "being you my prime"

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- WINTER DIARY -

Sweet poem and didn't expect it to take this turn. I feel like the titles don't actually hint about what's happening in the poem though.

Suggested changes: I didn't get what "sparkle of heart" is supposed to mean to be honest. If it actually means something, no worries but if it doesn't, you might want to word it differently.

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- BEST FRIENDS FOREVER -

This was such a heart-touching poem. Gave me all the feels! *_*

Suggested changes: the line "we friendly find problem's solution" sounds a bit off to me. the word "friendly" can be replaced by something else like "quickly" or "effortlessly" possibly  + sparkled the world from "afar" instead of "far" + "Fills" my smile could be something like "Widens" my smile + erases all my "cries" instead of "crise" there.

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- SUNNY SOUL -

This poem had some very beautiful descriptions and imagery! Enjoyed reading it!

Suggested changes: the breeze "blows" instead of "blow" though that would alter your rhyme scheme for the next line. I have to admit, I couldn't understand what "until the sky was crayon" is supposed to imply. If it's intentional, no worries else you may consider altering the word choices there.

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Other points:

Loved the images you've inserted before each poetry. Makes the whole reading experience much more aesthetic. Overall, very enjoyable bite sized poems. Had fun reading so far! Wishing you good luck for this story ahead *_*

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