Do Not Give Up

By Kim01251 (I couldn't find the story you requested for anymore, so I read this one instead)

Title: It's a really interesting title. A little deceptive, but still luring readers in.

Blurb: The blurb is really short, a little too short for my liking, and also kind of rushed. Try being a little more specific. What is the W.I.C.K.E.D. program? How are characters supposed to be involved with this? A blurb has to make the story a little clearer to readers, not confuse them.

Cover: The cover is really simple and doesn't relate that much to the story. Since is supposed to be a Percy Jackson × The Maze Runner crossover, perhaps you should choose something more fit. I'm sure that a good graphic designer can help you.

Plot: Since I don't know either fandom, I won't judge you for that. I can say, though, that you seem to know them very well and you managed to incorporate both in a good way. Your plot already seems to take a definite direction within a reasonable pace. For now I read Chapter 1 only, but I'm considering reprising reading at a further stage.

Grammar: I haven't seen glaring grammar mistakes, but your sentences are kind of run-on, which affects negatively the flow.

Overall rate: 7/10

Would I recommend reading this story? If you are a fan of Percy Jackson and/or The Maze Runner sagas, you may find this short crossover interesting.

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