Reviewer: AcapriccioRhythm
Client: Historyfan2003
Book Title: The Shadows of Trinity

Title: 9/10

I find the title to be unique, yet still captures the essence of the story. Personally, I don't think it would catch my eye as a reader - as I tend to go for more mystery heavy books. However, others might beg to differ. Nonetheless, I do love the fact that you used your title to foreshadow the story; I believe the trinity referred to here is the sign for radiation? Regardless, it does give off a more potently mysterious atmosphere.

Cover: 7/10

Covers are a very important element in books. While some might say not to judge a book by its cover, I beg to disagree in this instance. For one, I find the cover to be a bit too messy in the background, and the color scheme, heavily influenced by gray, to be a bit dull. It doesn't feel intriguing, nor does it feel eye-catching.

Might I suggest you choose a plain black background, with the radiation symbol a neon color (green or yellow), matching the signs we see. Keep the silhouette as it is very intriguing, and make the title brighter. This is just a mere suggestion on my end, feel free to ignore it.

Blurb: 3.5/5

I enjoyed reading the blurb. It contained enough information about the plot without revealing how it would be executed. I did find that the first paragraph felt incomplete. It felt like there was something missing from it.

Might I suggest you connect the two paragraphs using a semicolon (;), and change the word "help" to "aid". I also suggest tweaking your opening line. Instead of "In an alternate 1950, where the", which feels a bit awkward. I propose you do this: "In an alternate 1950's timeline, the". I've chosen to remove the word "where" as I found it to cause the sentence to feel disjointed and incomplete.

Grammar/Vocabulary/Technicalities: 20/25

The author's grammar is good; they have a good grasp over the English language. The scenes are described quite well, which shows the author knows how to keep things engaging for the reader, a very good sign of a great writer. However, I did notice a few sentences that didn't use proper punctuation, or a lack thereof. These can be easily edited, which should be of no worrisome consequence. The punctuation doesn't get in the way of reading, so it isn't a very big deal.

Plot Execution: 13/15

The plot execution is really good. The author dove right into the action, which is something that I don't find commonly in many stories. A lot of the time, people like to use the first few chapters to introduce their characters, but the author chose to do the character introduction along with the action. It's quite refreshing as it allows readers to get into the action and frames their mind into a more hyper aware state, so to speak. It makes the story more engaging, and thus more fun to read. It also makes us analyze the scenes more, and forces us to connect with the characters early on.

Characters: 8.5/10

The characters are quite well written. And though it is somewhat based on real people, they still have their own unique attributes that have been instilled by the author. I also love the somewhat realistic portrayal of what a person would do in a situation where you are being hunted down. It makes for more fun characters, and makes readers want to root for them. I must say I can't wait for the author to fully flesh out these characters, and give them some further development.

Creativity/Originality: 9/10

An alternative reality is already a very creative premise for a story. While I won't say it is an original concept, as it has been done many times, I do think that the author brings their own spin to it.

Genre Relevance: 5/5

It is very much relevant to the genre of historical fiction. The author takes elements from real life events that happened and added their own fictional twist to it. I do say that it could also be under science fiction due to the alternate reality and heavy concentration on scientific research i.e. atomic bombs.

Reading Enjoyment: 8/10

I must say that I did very much enjoy what I was reading. Though I am not much of an American history fan, as I tend to read more on Victorian, Regency eras, I did enjoy the book. The author really made it easy for me to immerse myself in their story.

Overall thoughts and suggestions: 83/100
Overall, I think it's a really good story with tremendous amounts of potential. A few tweaks and edits here and there will surely bring this story to new heights. I have given a few suggestions and comments above, so I will no longer add anymore here. I wish the author the best in their writing journey. Keep writing and improving. Don't strive for perfection but progress.