Reviewer: Caitrw

Client: IR3NIC

Book Title: Sweet Dreams

Title: 5/5
The book title is perfect for what the book is about and flows the plot.

Blurb: 3/5
The blurb gives just the right amount of information where it does not give away too much that way. The only areas that need work is wording the blurb a little bit better and the use of commas since they are misplaced.

Plot/flow of story: 10/20
The plot of the story remains consistent throughout the entire story where I did not feel lost about the plot while reading it. However, when it comes to the flow of the story that's where I got lost. The story moved a little bit too fast and I felt lost when reading since I did not know who I was reading about due to the many uses of him.

Character Development: 8/10
The author did a good job with starting the character development and is on the right track with the characters. The only area that needs improvement is the characters' descriptions since there was a lack of them.

Grammar: 2/5
When it comes to the grammar the story has a good use of strong words instead of using the traditional words which helps make it a strong story. However, the sentences could have worded better and some paragraphs could have been switched around such as in the beginning with introducing kook the author first talked about him then said who he was but i was lost about who i was reading about. Another area that could be improved is not used and when not needed for the beginning of the sentence instead use transition words. Lastly, there was some misuse of the semicolon (;) and comma or periods.

Readers enjoyment: 7/10
I really enjoyed the story however, I just found it hard to follow along as a reader.

Overall Score: 35/55

Review:

Overall, the story has a lot of great potential and has a great start. The story has elements that keep the readers interested with the scenes like the war or the action. The story has a chapter where there was the start of good world building however, there could be more throughout the story. Do not be afraid to build a good description of the world around the characters since it will help readers imagine more with what's going on in the story. Furthermore, the other areas that could use some improvements are the character descriptions, grammar/ punctuation, and the flow. When it comes to the character descriptions there were some but there could be some more that way we as readers are able to imagine the characters as well. Once these improvements are made then the flow of the story will be a lot more smoother. I am really interested in the triangle that is going to happen and the idea is original for the story.