Submitted by catswithtophatss.

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BASIC INFORMATION;;
------ Name: Chickadee.
Nice. I have a Chickadee, too.

------ Age: 10 years old.
Reading this as a full sentence ("ten years old" as opposed to "10" or "10 years") calmed me for some reason.

------ Gender: Female.
Okay.

------ Sexuality: Bisexual.
LGBT is cool.

------ Tribe: Pure SkyWing.
Purebred, like it.

------ Abilities: She is a good fighter with her sharp claws, can breath fire, and is a good flyer.
I've seen this mistake everywhere and I'm too tired to correct it so you're my (un)lucky example. You cannot breath something. Breath is a noun. If you've been running for a while, you feel out of breath. Breath rhymes with death.
You can, on the other hand, breathe something. Breathe is a verb. You can breathe in and breathe out. Breathe rhymes with seethe.
She cannot breath fire. She can, however, breathe fire.

------ Relationship Status: Single.
Okay.

------ Occupation: Hunter for the SkyWing kingdom.
A bit common, but alright.

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PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION;;
------ Scale Color: An orangish red with darker flecks giving her the nickname of Embers.
So why didn't her parents just name her Embers?

------ Eye Color: A washed-out teal.
I like it.

------ Build: She's scrawny little to no muscles.
I'm assuming you meant to include a "with" or a comma somewhere in there. This is my favourite build to use, so no complaints here.

------ Height: I'm going to assume full-grown dragons are between 18'3 and 18'5 so she's 16'4.
I use the metric system, so your guess is as good as mine.

------ OND: She has a bracelet of rubies from her affectionate cousin who is the husband of the queen (Amber).
Affectionate, huh?

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PERSONALITY;;
------ Strengths: Great flyer, good at sneaking around, kinda likable (can be considered annoying).
How is flight a personality trait?
Also, how is she likable? Is she nice? Funny? Charismatic? Sweet? You need to elaborate.

Weaknesses: Easily hurt (physical), easily cold, not good at taking enemies head on.
Once again, physical traits belong in the "Physical Description" section, not the personality. I'm interested in the "easily cold" part, though.
How is she easily physically hurt if she's a good fighter?

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BACKSTORY;;
Chickadee was born with two sisters and one brother she being the second oldest she was raised lovingly with her kind parents she was gifted a bracelet from her cousin. She got out her school early from skipping her first grade because of her already knowing all the lessons from her sister mountain telling every thing when she was too young to go to school. She took on a part time job of being a hunter for some chiefs for the queen. When she was hunting one day she was chasing an goat and a group of SandWing who were scent as thieves for the outclass found her and killed her on sight by tearing into her with their claws and teeth.  
My apologies if this sounds rude, but is English your first language? There are several grammatical errors in this. I'll correct her backstory below, and then review it:

Chickadee was born with two sisters and one brother, herself being the second oldest. She was raised lovingly with her kind parents. She was gifted a bracelet from her cousin. She got out her school early from skipping her first grade, because she already knew all the lessons from her sister, Mountain, who told her everything when she was too young to go to school. She took on a part time job as a hunter for some of the queen's chiefs. When she was hunting one day she was chasing a goat and a group of SandWings who were sent as thieves for the Outclaws found her and killed her on sight by tearing into her with their claws and teeth.
Much better. Now, let's get to the reviewing.

Chickadee was born with two sisters and one brother, herself being the second oldest. She was raised lovingly with her kind parents.
Good start.

She was gifted a bracelet from her cousin.
Why is this important? You should put that in.

She got out her school early from skipping her first grade, because she already knew all the lessons from her sister, Mountain, who told her everything when she was too young to go to school.
I'm pretty sure Mountain didn't teach her all of the school syllabus before she went to school.
Also, if she learned so much before school and got out of school early, wouldn't she be pretty intelligent? You should mention that in her  personality.

She took on a part time job as a hunter for some of the queen's chiefs.
Interesting. I would've thought she would get a more academic job, since she learns so well and got out of school quickly.

When she was hunting one day she was chasing a goat and a group of SandWings who were sent as thieves for the Outclaws found her and killed her on sight by tearing into her with their claws and teeth.
Well. Um. Wow. That was sudden.
I'd be very interested in knowing what the Outclaws were doing in the Sky Kingdom. You mentioned they were thieves, so what were they trying to steal?
I'd also like to know why they killed her. Thieves normally try to hide from others. They'd only kill her if she caught them in the act. Also, if memory serves, you said she was a good fighter and flyer. Wouldn't she be able to fight them off, then fly away?

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COMMENTS;;
------ The good...
For the most part, Chickadee is a good OC. I love her name, and her appearance is very pleasing to read. She's not overpowered and doesn't have that much tragedy. Also, I liked the plot twist at the end of her backstory; I've never come across a dead WoF character before. I love it!

------ The bad...
Her personality and backstory are a bit inconsistent. They don't seem connected. For example, you said she is a good fighter, but then that she is easily hurt and was killed by a group of SandWings. Wouldn't she be able to escape if she was a good fighter?
Also, I was a bit confused when you said she became a hunter. She sounds like a very smart dragon - since she was able to get out of school quickly - so why did she take that job instead of a job as a scholar or a teacher?

------ How you can improve!
There's a very simple solution here, and that is to take out the mention of her being good at fighting. It means her death makes a lot more sense, and it fits her physical description. You should also mention that she's smart in her personality. Maybe change her job to reflect this too; instead of a hunter, she could be a scholar, librarian, strategist, writer, mathematician, or a teacher - to name a few. Dragons still need to hunt for food, so she could still be caught out in the open chasing a goat and killed by those SandWings.
Also, you did have a few spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes here and there. If you need any help with that, you're welcome to message me any time. I'm happy to correct mistakes and help out.

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OVERALL RATING;; 7.5/10.
I like this character. I like her a lot. I very nearly gave her an 8.

Good luck with writing/roleplaying her in the future!

- Siri Mom.